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The Golden Boy
06-06-2008, 12:41 PM
The scene opens with a still frame of Xander Youngston covering Fire at Deadend. The camera pans out to reveal Xander Youngston sitting in a light brown leather seat aboard his private jet with a remote in his hand. Youngston presses play, and stares at the video as the ref counts the 1, 2, 3, but right before his hand hits for the 3, the bell begins to ring. Youngston rewinds the tape and watches the count once again, then another time, and another before he shuts the TV off, and tosses the remote onto the ground. The noise wakes up Xanders personal assistant Sarah who is sleeping in the chair across from him. She wakes up and looks over to see Xander with an expression of anger, as he cracks his knuckles.

Sarah
Xander, what's wrong? Why don't you try to get some sleep?

Xander Youngston
It's that damn match, hell it's the whole night. First off they slap some time limit on my match and don't even inform anyone of it. I had that piece of trash fire beat, the ref counted the one, two, three, and then they say it's a draw.

Sarah
It's fine everyone saw what you did, and they know that you had him beat. You'll get him next time, don't obsess over it.

Xander Youngston
I had him this time, I beat him, but it's going to go on my record as a draw. Then that damn battle royal was a farce to begin with. How the hell are you going to decide a heavyweight champion in one of the most unpredictable matches where certain people have the advantage of coming in later than others. They'll probably try to stack the deck against me, and make me start off that gauntlet match. I'm telling you this Nightmare asshole has it out for me. He's scared that my star will eclipse his, and people would forget about him. I mean it's a little coincidental that he forfeited the title the very same week it was announced I'd be coming to the AWF.

Sarah
I really doubt that he has some kind of grudge or vendetta against you Xander. The title thing was a coincidence, and the time limit thing just happened, and I'm sure you won't have to start out the gauntlet match, and if you do then it's just bad luck.

Xander Youngston
Bad luck or bad management? I mean doesn't he realize what I'm doing, don't the fans realize what I'm doing? I'm trying to save them from mediocre wrestlers, and boring matches. It's why I made targets of Maeda, Johnny K, and Fire and Niji when I came in. It's the same damn reason I took out Maeda and X-Klaus at Deadend, I kept the fans from having to witness a horrible match between two losers.

Sarah
You didn't really do that did you? I mean I know what the little note said, and everyone thought it was you, but I figured it was just a crazy coincidence.

Xander Youngston
No I did that, and I'm proud of it. Those two are an embarrassment to the wrestling business, and the AWF.

Sarah
Xander, look I get that you don't like these people or whatever, but you don't need to go around attacking people and making enemies.

Xander Youngston
I don't care about enemies or friends Sarah, I'm better than everyone on this damn roster, and I can attack whoever I want. I'm going to prove that the draw was a fluke, the battle royal was crap, and that no matter what they want to do in that gauntlet match, I'll be the one coming out on top.

Sarah
I'm just saying that you have other things to worry about than just AWF. I know that you want the title, and I know that you'll win it when you get a real chance, but remember you do have other business. You still have to focus on your responsibilities within Youngston enterprises.

Xander Youngston
I know all about what I have to do with the damn family business, but that' simple.

Sarah
Well focus because when we land, a cars going to be waiting for you. I'll head to the office, and gather some information on your opponents in the gauntlet match. You have to go the Malibu Compound, and see how things are progressing with project 46.

Xander Youngston
They're still not done with that?

Sarah
No, that's why your father wants you to go out there and see why it's still behind schedule, and what it's going to take to not only get it back on schedule, but completed.

Xander Youngston
Fine, I'm going to go ahead and get some sleep.

Xander just leans back in his seat closing his eyes, as the scene fades to black.

*** 8 Hours Later ***

The scene opens as a white 08 Rolls Royce Phantom pulls up outside of a large factory. The car comes to a stop, and quickly a driver exits from the front. The driver goes around the car, and opens the back door for Xander Youngston to step out.

Driver
Here we are sir, the Malibu compound.

Xander Youngston
I hate coming to this place, just wait for me hopefully I won't be long.

Xander Youngston simply walks ahead, and opens the door heading into the large building. He is immediately greeted by a guy in a white coat who's name badge reads Dr. Kinslow.

Dr. Kinslow
Ah Mr. Youngston, it's great to see you again.

Xander Youngston
Cut the crap Kinslow, I'm hear about project 46

Dr. Kinslow gets a surprised and somewhat anxious look on his face as Xander says this.

Dr. Kinslow
Oh well, we're hard at work, there have just been unexpected complications.

Xander Youngston
Unexpected complications? You're 3 months behind schedule asshole.

Xander is clearly angered at this point, as he gets in the doctors face.

Xander Youngston
Take me to where they're working right now.

Dr. Kinslow
Yes sir.

Dr. Kinslow then leads Xander down the factory, and then to a small hallway down the left. At the end of the hallway they reach a solid metal door, that only has PROJECT 46 printed on it in black letters. The doctor swipes a key card, and then has to give both a hand print and retinal scan before he can open the door. The door opens to several scientists busy at work all gathered around a table.

Scientist 1
I'm telling you it needs more power, there's no way it'll work on that amount.

Scientist 2
It's not the power, it's the weight, it's too heavy.

Scientist 3
We need a lighter metal.

Scientist 4
A lighter metal will burn up.

Scientist 5
What if we used an alloy to drop the weight some, upped the power, and gave it some kind of flame resistant lining?

Scientist 6
That could work, but what about the pulse blasts, I think it would overpower everything, and possibly explode in mid air.

Dr. Kinslow
Ladies, gentleman, stop for right now. We have Mr. Youngston here.

Xander Youngston
No don't stop, keep doing your damn job, and explain to me why everything is so far behind schedule.

Dr. Kinslow
Well as you just heard, we're having problems with many of the technical aspects.

Xander Youngston
It's called testing, how many of those brilliant ideas have you actually tried out?

Scientist 4
Well 2 of them.

Xanders eyes go wide, and he looks ready to explode.

Xander Youngston
TWO, TWO IDEAS? HOW MANY FUCKING IDEAS HAVE YOU HAD?

Scientist 2
Uhm, probably about 30 or so.

Xander Youngston
AND YOU'VE TRIED TWO... Get your shit together, start doing more tests, and try out anything and everything. You idiots have one month to get the prototype completed and ready.

Dr. Kinslow
Sir, there's now way it can be ready in a month

Xander Youngston
You find a damn way, or every one of you will be out on your asses.

Youngston just turns, and walks straight out slamming the door behind him. Dr. Kinslow tries to go after him, but he doesn't listen, and just goes straight out to his car, as the driver opens the door or him.

Xander Youngston
Office now, quick as possible.

Xander just gets into the car, and the driver quickly does the same as he heads off. Xander is clearly angry and upset at the lack of progress on the companies latest project, as he opens a small compartment next to him, and pulls out a bottle of Chopin vodka, and pours himself a large shot. He puts the bottle and glass back before grabbing himself a bottle of Defense Vitamin Water, before he gets out his phone. Xander scrolls through his contacts list before stopping on Sarah's name and calling her.

Xander Youngston
Sarah, I just left the Malibu compound, I'll be at the office in about 20 minutes. Call the AWF camera crew, and have them come there. I need to do something to get my mind off of this Project 46 bullshit.

Sarah
What's wrong with it, I mean besides being behind schedule?

Xander Youngston
The team working on it are a bunch of idiots. Almost a years worth of research, and they’ve only tested two of the ideas they've had. Two out of thirty, they're completely incompetent. The government is breathing down our damn necks, and because of some stupid scientist who are supposed geniuses we have nothing. I just want to forget about that for 10 minutes, do some research for my match, and issue a statement about my opponents.

Sarah
Everything will be ready when you get here, Also they released the order for the Gauntlet match.

Xander Youngston
Let me guess Nightmare pulled a bitch move and put me in at one or two, that son of a bitch is driving me crazy.

Sarah
Actually you're in at number 6, Santino and Reyes are one and two, Roebuck is number three, X-Klaus is number four, Kraven in number five, you're number six, Kevin Blade is number seven, and Duncan Aries is number eight.

Xander Youngston
Well at least Nightmare was almost fair, and knew not to screw over his top talent. Still no surprise that his little bitch Aries got the number eight spot.

Sarah
Yes he had quite a bit to say, I have the footage from him, Kraven, X-Klaus, Santino, and Roebuck.

Xander Youngston
Perfect, now what would I do without you.

Sarah
Probably forget your social security number.

Xander Youngston
Hey I know that, it's eight.

Sarah
You're missing seven numbers Xander.

Xander Youngston
Well that's what I have you for. Anyways, tell the camera crew to be there in an hour. I'm ten minutes from the office, that should give me time to watch the footage from those idiots, and go over a few things.

Sarah
Of course.

Xander Youngston
Thanks, I'll see you in a few minutes.

Sarah
Bye Xander.

Sarah hangs up as Xander does the same, and the scene fades to black.

*** 1 Hour Later ***

The scene opens with Xander Youngston sitting behind a solid glass desk in a large black leather chair, as he goes over a few papers. He looks over tem for a few seconds, before a camera crew comes through the door of his office.

Xander Youngston
Good, right on time.

Cameraman
You said an hour, so we're here. Just give us a little bit to set up, and we’ll be ready to go.

Xander Youngston
All right.

Xander goes back to his work, as the crew set everything up. About five minutes later the main cameraman motions to him.

Cameraman
Ready to start whenever you are.

Xander Youngston
Let's get this going.

Cameraman
All right, 5, 4, 3

The cameraman counts off 2, 1, and then the view shifts as if looking through the camera.

Xander Youngston
Santino Esposito, Draeden Reyes, Chris Roebuck, X Klaus, Kraven, Kevin Blade, Duncan Aries. These are the seven other men involved in the gauntlet match at the next upcoming Vengeance. These are the men trying to become the team captain of team AWF at the Summer Games pay per view. These are the seven men that I'm going to have to defeat. These are the seven men I'm going to have to break. These are the seven men I'm going to have to humiliate. Of course when you look at the order of entry in this match, I'm only guaranteed to be facing Kevin Blade and Duncan Aries, the two men who will enter after me, those are the only men that I am guaranteed to beat, before that anything could happen, I could have to come in and wipe the mat up with any of those five other men.

It could be Santino Esposito, the guy coming in at number one, he could potentially go all the way in this thing, until I come in. I do have to say that the guy has guts, the guy has been in some wars over his short career, and now he's even fighting with a gun shot wound. I know that can't be haled up yet, because he keeps re injuring it every single week, he just keeps making it worse, and that's going to be his downfall. Santino an old friend once told me something that I've always remembered going into a fight. He told me attack a man's strengths, nobody ever expects you to go after the strongest part of the castle. Your strength is you will, your desire to win, and it would be so easy to turn that against you. If it is you that I'm facing when I come in, all I have to do is wait for you to make that one fatal mistake, to take that big chance, to show the kind of determination and will you have, and then simply capitalize. Santino you're a talented guy no doubt, and nobody can ever say that you're not willing to do whatever it takes to win. However you're just not that smart, you're not intelligent enough to realize that sometimes there's a better option, there's a shortcut, something that you can exploit. I on the other hand always look for that shortcut, that simple thing I can do to make getting a win just that much easier.

Of course maybe it won't be Santino at all, maybe it's going to be his good buddy Draeden Reyes, maybe he'll take you right out of the match before you can even do something stupid Santino. Hell I almost hope it is you Reyes, because then not only would I go one step further in becoming the team captain, but I could also continue my mission of taking out the trash here in the AWF. See Reyes you're exactly the kind of person that doesn't belong in this company, you're a thug, a want to be gangster, a pathetic little street bitch who got lucky that he had some friends in this company. What have you even done Reyes, won a tag match, beat some overgrown monkey, and hit some people from behind. You don't even deserve to be in that ring at Vengeance, and if somehow you make it until I come in, I'll prove that to you very quickly.

Now speaking of trash we have X Klaus, now Roebuck don't worry I didn't forget about you, I just figured it was a nice segway. X Klaus, you're an even better example of the trash I’m trying to rid the AWF of then even Reyes. You and your step brother are not only a plague on this company, and wrestling, but you're a plague on this entire world. You idiots do nothing, and have nothing. You give nothing back to society, and you sit around in what is probably a crack house drinking, and rambling on about sexiness or some kind of moronic crap like that. X Klaus you are simply the lowest common denominator, the bottom rung of society, you are what shit calls shit, you are what people scrape off the bottom of their shoes, you are pathetic, you are worthless, and you are absolutely and completely devoid of any purpose. I can only pray that someone ends the misery that is your life before Vengeance so that I don't even have to risk seeing someone like you.

Now however we move to almost the other end of the spectrum, we move to one Chris Roebuck, a man who while still being a loser, and in no way close to the level of myself, actually has the slightest bit of class. Chris you're not on my level, by your own admission, you're not ready for the Justice or even the intercontinental or great lakes championship, whatever they're calling it. Now I have to wonder how a man who says that he himself is not ready to go after the biggest prize in this company, thinks that he's worthy of the biggest honor in this company. Chris you do realize that there's a whole lot more than pride on the line at Summer Games. You realize that the man who wins it all not only gets bragging rights, but he also gets a shot at the WWA World Champion. You sit there and say you want to focus on singles gold, maybe the Vengeance or Brawler championship, and that's just fine for you. I however am focused on becoming the top man not only in this company, but in the entire WWA. How do you expect to be a successful captain, when you don't even think you're worthy of fighting for the top title in this company?

Now one man who does think he's worthy, one man who thinks he was pretty much robbed of the Justice title at Deadend is Kraven, the man who enters the match right before me, the man with everything to prove, and almost nothing to lose. One way or another this guy will be on the AWF team at Summer Games, and while I don't like the guy one single bit, I will say that he's the only man in this match that I would accept losing to, he's the only other man in this match who I view as being worthy of the captains spot. However that doesn't mean I'm not going to do everything I can to beat you if you're the man who's in there when I enter the ring Kraven. I may respect you, but you would still be standing in the way of me and my ultimate goal. See I know that everyone in this company hates me, and no matter how much I do, unless I win this gauntlet match, I would get shut out of the team over pure jealousy. So Kraven, if you are that man when it's my time, be prepared for the fight of your life, be prepared to end up as the hunted, and the slaughtered.

Now the two men who enter the ring after me, that's where the fun really starts. First we got Kevin Blade, the guy who for the last several weeks has been beaten, bloodied, and broken. Feeling a little naked there without that Vengeance title to keep you warm, Kevin? You know maybe about a month ago I could have seen you being in this match which is supposed to be for the best of the best, but not anymore. Kevin you simply don’t have it anymore, it's like you won that title, and just lost all focus, all drive, all motivation. You've seemingly been a shell of the wrestler you once were, and come Vengeance I have a feeling it will be quite easy to take you out of this match, and keep getting closer to being the captain. I'll simply take you down and out, and be left with one man to beat.

Now that one man who I'll have left to beat has been the cause for a lot of talk, and a little bit of controversy. Now Aries, I'm not going to sit there like Kraven or Esposito and say that you did nothing, because I know that you did make an elimination or two. Did you catch a lucky break by being the last man to enter the battle royal, well yea, but can't exactly fault you for having good luck. Are you catching another lucky break with this gauntlet match by being the last man to enter? Yea, and I would like to say that it's just good luck once again, but we both know that isn't the case. Still I don't want to get into that right now Duncan. I will say that you seem to understand the way things work, I actually see a lot of similarities between myself and you. See you know just like I do that greatness comes to those who take it. You also say whatever you want to say, and are okay with being the bad guy so long as you get the win. Now that is all well and good, my problem, with you comes from one simple fact. There can only be one villain in the story, and I was here before you.

For everyone in the battle royal, it doesn't matter if you're a champion, an ex champion, a perennial runner up, a piece of trash, or too dumb to know when to quit, come Vengeance you will all fall at the feet of your new team captain, and you will all Meet the Metro King.

As he finishes, the scene fades with Xander giving a cocky grin as he leans back in his chair.

megszentségteleníthetetlenségeskedéseitekért
06-06-2008, 02:42 PM
I don't think this was a bad roleplay by any stretch of the imagination, but you could do with losing "The Scene opens" its boring, and as a reader we know the scene has begun, I would also do away with mentioning the camera unless its a direct promo, because most of this obviously wasn't an open promo, and yet with the camera description you could totally go after it, because its presented in that manner.

I would also like to mention that every wrestling match has a time limit, and it makes your character look like he has no clue whats going on in the ring, when you say that a time limit has been magically added.

The story elements don't interest me, but thats because I haven't read any of your previous work to know whats going on with it, but if that is the start of this story line, it was too vague.

Otherwise solid work.

Zortalk
06-06-2008, 03:51 PM
As stated before, your characterization of Xander is pretty right on with the whole "I want to physically hurt this cocky, arrogant bastard" gimmick.

It works but there are some places where it can be improved upon. Not exactly with Xander himself but his supporting cast. Most of them play the submissive role and just end up pushing him along, barely. They don't add much to the story other than to give something for Youngston to reply to, in a cocky or belittling manner.

I like how Sarah is getting a bit more attention, only her character role is getting a bit confused. In the beginning of her role she plays the "straight man" allowing Xander to talk about being exploited, underutilized and all that jazz. It's all fine and dandy, but other than that she doesn't show much personality. It's all business and she's just going through the motions. Maybe she does care, but it doesn't really show with the words. After the whole Project 46 spectacle (we'll get into it later) her tone changes, mainly because of the direct quote from Ironman. I'd really avoid this in the future. In this case, avoid because it really doesn't work well with the beginning or any of the characters to be perfectly frank. Maybe it's because I'm reading to where the quote was from, but Xander has yet to show that he is a genius, in fact the only he has shown is he's the son of some business mogul and has been given a position of relative importance. Sarah also hasn't been given any real financial responsibility or any duties other than to give him information about his match and be the angel on his shoulder.

Your secondary character roles need a bit of substance, they need to accent Xander. Right now there just kind of there.

On a like note: The Scientists and Project 46. Where were the Scientists backbones? I understand, fear that the boss is going to cancel the project and they'll be back working Radio Shack or worse but, they've spent how long on this project and aren't willing to tell the guy "Back off, we're doing the best we can" or "Do you want us to demand more money for testing?" or "Get out of here, you don't know what you're talking about, you're just the suit assigned to us to oversee operations."

More importantly, what does this prove? That Xander is a terrible business man and relies on threats to his employees? We get it, Xander is a bastard, a heel and someone we want to strangle through out monitors, but if the man is put in charge of some big huge project he isn't going to pop a blood vessel over these things. He's going to handle it tactfully and with some understanding. A Year and two full scale testings for a (insert car/airplane/weapon systems/some future technology here) isn't bad. That is unless it's something like putting some fins on the back of a car or something incredibly lame. This part was just unbelievable and uninteresting at best. I equate this to a scene from Freddy Got Fingered. You know the one, Tom Green is in the restaurant with his girlfriend and starts yelling through the cell phone about how the guy lost the account and is fired... laughter ensues. This, was that, but with out the comedy.

Other than that, you've got a few missed question marks, grammar and some sentences that seem to repeat themselves.

Trash talk is the standard fair, I won't get into it this time around.

Overall, pretty decent for the opening roleplay of the week. I can see the second one being a bit stronger on the trash talk when more roleplays are posted.

Jason
06-06-2008, 05:00 PM
How is this any different then plagiarism dude. Honestly. You ripped a well known and funny part of Iron Man and passed it off as it was your own...that's pretty damn low. It isn't even like a line. It's an exchange.

Also the whole Project 46 thing had a feel of Ironman to it as well, your coming off as that crazy Arab guy who wants the missile built.

Honestly, cut the crap dude. Originality is e-fedding. Any one can copy a movie.

How many times are you going to say, "these are the seven men...". You said these are the seven men I have to beat, these are the seven men I have to defeat, these are the seven men that I have to break, these are the seven men I have to take. Does anyone talk like that in really life? No. These are the seven men I have to beat, defeat, break and take in order to win. That simple. It's just filler and it's annoying after a point.

I know that can't be haled up yet, because he keeps re injuring it every single week, he just keeps making it worse, and that's going to be his downfall. That's a sentence you wrote in your trashtalk segment...

I know his wound can't be healed yet. He keeps re-injuring the thing ever week. He just keeps making it worse and it's going to be his downfall. More efficient, not a run on, spelling mistake corrected.

"A want to be gangster"...dude "wannabe gangster" sounds better. Say it, if it sounds good it's good, if it doesn't it's not good. It's an easy concept.

"Now however we move to almost the other end of the spectrum, we move to one Chris Roebuck, a man who while still being a loser, and in no way close to the level of myself, actually has the slightest bit of class." --> That kind of comes off that your calling yourself a loser.

But honestly stop with the IRONMAN quoting...wtf.

Justin
06-06-2008, 05:08 PM
Or at least have the good sense to paraphrase.

The Golden Boy
06-06-2008, 09:19 PM
I used one quote from Ironman, and I didn't take the quote exactly. I did change it up a little, not to mention that I used the quote because I wanted to show that the relationship between Xander & Sarah is very similar to that relationship. Show me one person who has not used a quote from a movie or TV show at one time or another, and they're probably lying.

Zortalk
06-06-2008, 09:29 PM
It's not using the movie quotes that is the problem. I use them all the time, there are probably dozens in my AWF promos and I've only done six at most (props to anyone who can spot all the Rocky Horror Picture Show lines.)

If you wanted to convey the dynamics between Sarah and Xander their would have been a much better way to do it then "paraphrase" an easily recognizable quote from a movie. Even if you changed it up, we don't see Xander and Sarah in the context, we see Pepper Pots and Tony Stark.

From what I've read of your material, I know Sarah and Xander have some forbidden love employer/employee love angle going on. If it's going to be similar to Tony Stark/Pepper Pots, Might I suggest giving Xander Youngston a genius feel to him and give a Sarah a last name along with some better business/manager sense.

As I stated, Sarah is a weak secondary character who need to be built up rather than support Xander's already developed character.

Jason
06-07-2008, 02:20 PM
Xander don't bother posting your shit here anymore. Honestly this isn't a place for you to critique our critiques. I don't use movie quotes in my Catalyst promos and if I did, it's a quote to prove a point.

There is a major difference to a character saying, "The force is strong with this one" and then stealing a scene/chunk from Iron Man. And as I recall that isn't really changed up at all. At all...

Like I said before if you can't take our critiques, and our criticism, don't post here. Because honestly I'm fed up with people providing pages upon pages of stuff for you to work on and you not working on it. If your going to post here at least pretend to take us to heart.

In the mean time how come no one critiques my shit.

Zortalk
06-07-2008, 02:31 PM
In the mean time how come no one critiques my shit.

Because it doesn't need it?

I mean sure, if I really wanted to I could pick out some awkward sentences and parts that I thought weren't up to par, but you haven't provided anything that I thought was especially bad, mediocre or anything that was moderately lame with Francis Hamilton.

Sometimes no critique is a good critique.

awf
06-07-2008, 06:11 PM
Xander don't bother posting your shit here anymore. Honestly this isn't a place for you to critique our critiques. I don't use movie quotes in my Catalyst promos and if I did, it's a quote to prove a point.

There is a major difference to a character saying, "The force is strong with this one" and then stealing a scene/chunk from Iron Man. And as I recall that isn't really changed up at all. At all...

Like I said before if you can't take our critiques, and our criticism, don't post here. Because honestly I'm fed up with people providing pages upon pages of stuff for you to work on and you not working on it. If your going to post here at least pretend to take us to heart.

In the mean time how come no one critiques my shit.


When guys post crap like this on the boards is what kills a place. If you had an issue with what he's doing take it up with him through pm. This isn't the place to belittle people.

Kraven
06-07-2008, 06:54 PM
I'd post my stuff in the feedback forum but I don't wanna find out I really suck :P

Ken
06-07-2008, 06:58 PM
Okay guys, let's cool it a bit in here. Catalyst, it's perfectly acceptable for a handler to respond to the criticism he/she received, whether it's to accept the feedback or to argue his own case. A dialogue can be a constructive thing IF it remains civil.

Based on what I read in this thread alone, Xander explained why he used his Iron Man reference, didn't say anything about the other criticism he got, and it wasn't especially confrontational. So there's no need to get heated up over this. Keep it constructive and objective.

That said, Xander, I do agree with the other responders that the segment at Project 46 was lifted pretty much directly from Iron Man. Movie references are cool with me, but try to be more creative and original about it. If the tone of the writing had been more in line with parody or satire, that'd be one thing. But this was an obvious borrowing of an existing idea, which came off kind of lame to me.

Ken

Paul
06-07-2008, 07:04 PM
I'd post my stuff in the feedback forum but I don't wanna find out I really suck :P

You only suck if you're not willing to take reasonable advice. ;)

awf
06-07-2008, 07:30 PM
There are some of us who though haven't seen the movie and do not know about what is being used from said movie or what has been revamped in the rps.

Kraven
06-07-2008, 07:53 PM
You only suck if you're not willing to take reasonable advice. ;)

Nah, I'd rather not.

Lol, j/k. I'll post something some day I'm sure :)

Ken
06-07-2008, 09:13 PM
There are some of us who though haven't seen the movie and do not know about what is being used from said movie or what has been revamped in the rps.

Then you should get out to the cinema more often, my friend. ;)

Ken

awf
06-07-2008, 09:46 PM
lol I can't when you have a wife and two kids to support. Things that are a luxury come only every once in a while.

Justin
06-07-2008, 11:31 PM
Don't pull that shit, I've got an ex-wife, a kid, a fiancee, and her two kids, and I manage to put away time and money to see movies. Don't pull that "aww, poor me" shit, you'll get laughed at.

A lot.

As far as the Iron Man reference, it's perfectly okay to reference a movie, or use a movie quote to prove a point, or even to satire a movie. No one is arguing that. What everyone is saying is that you took a scene from Iron Man, rewrote it with your own characters, and called it a Xander roleplay.

That'd be like me having FDJ get hit with a Gamma Bomb and every time he gets mad he turns green, gets all huge, and screams "FRANK SMASH!"

It's borderline plagerism, don't fucking do it.

Jeff
06-07-2008, 11:37 PM
This stuff with Golden Boy is starting to reach Master of Pain level proportions.

What that means, is that quite some time ago, a poster named "masterofpain76" posted RP after RP in the feedback forum. They were all poor and easy to criticize, and as such got way more than their fair share of attention.

If Golden Boys' RPs keep getting more than their fair share of the attention as they are doing now, I'll start closing them after the first 2 or 3 posts.

As it is, this one is now closed, and I urge everyone to put some of this energy into reviewing the good RPs.